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AsukaHotaru's avatar

I was not ready for the lilies growing through barren stone... I expected the scythe to be all threat, and then suddenly I’m worried about which bloom belongs to whom.

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Asuka, People often identify the reaper with something terrible, perhaps his purpose is to show us what we will leave behind. And that… makes a world of difference. Thanks for reading and commenting. I always look forward to hearing which part stood out to you the most. Monica

T.F. Burke watcher of tv's avatar

Wow! Very well written!👏☺️

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Thank you so much.

Tim Forsythe's avatar

Great, now I can’t sleep.

Brandi Lynn's avatar

I love how this beautifully reframes the Reaper not as a terrifying destroyer, but as an impartial mirror, leaving us with that haunting, quiet reminder that our everyday choices are the actual seeds of the legacy we'll eventually leave behind ✨

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Brandi, thank you for saying that. Death is not the end, we leave flowers (legacy). So happy you enjoyed it and saw this piece for what it is.

Monica Fernandes's avatar

Wow.

Sylvie Muir's avatar

What a beautiful and important lens to see this through. It's feels true

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Thank you reading and sharing this one Sylvie

Sarah Newton-John's avatar

Wonderful verse. Congrats!

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Thank you Sarah, Honestly this one has been a work in progress for over a week. Thank you for following my work. I appreciate you.

Anil Talwar's avatar

By shifting the terror away from the blade and onto the moral weight of the villagers' own pasts, you turn a gothic ghost story into a intense, hauntingly beautiful meditation on legacy, proving that death doesn't come to destroy us, but to harvest exactly what we've planted.

Monica A Leyva's avatar

I am so excited you read this as intended.

Steve Baker's avatar

Dear Ms. Leyva,

This one is in my territory.

A Reaper who isn’t cruel, who isn’t a monster, who walks like a storm but leaves lilies in his wake... that’s the exact shape of the death‑guide I’ve carried in my bones for years.

Just a figure who gathers what remains and lets the living see themselves clearly for once. I love how he shows the villagers the harvest of their own lives, then leaves lilies blooming in the stone. That’s the kind of death‑guide who feels ancient and true.

That’s my bayou reaper ... lantern‑soft, dusk‑born, patient as the tide.

Nice work.

Steve

Monica A Leyva's avatar

Thank you for reading and commenting Steve. I am thrilled you enjoyed my take on the Reaper. It is always about perspective isn’t it?

Steve Baker's avatar

Ms. Leyva,

Perspective is the whole game, isn’t it. People see a scythe and think terror, but some of us were raised knowing the Reaper’s just another threshold‑walker doing his quiet work. Your version carries that truth ... the kind that doesn’t shout, just stands there and lets the living reckon with themselves.

And truth is, I’ve seen that one a bunch ... the lantern‑soft kind, the one who doesn’t take more than he must, just shows people the truth they’ve been avoiding. Your version walks real close to the one that’s haunted my edges for years.

Glad our visions crossed paths in the dusk.

Steve

Robert Lorenz's avatar

"Death comes for us all"

Life is short so it is held dear.