I love that Sorrel has a friend now and even that Mara can come into to those stifling clinical situations with her to support how. I love that she is learning to write her truth.
The gap between institutionalized language and real language of humans is very apparent in this chapter. Mara’s dad who studies cracks in bridges is portrayed so well. Sorrel’s character is developing noticeably. Well done!
I love that Sorrel has a friend now and even that Mara can come into to those stifling clinical situations with her to support how. I love that she is learning to write her truth.
Me too, I love how this story is developing and I appreciate your engagement and feedback.
Love it, Monica. "Sorrel allowed the sentence to remain." Plus, her writing stuff down has a magic all of its own...
Words are damn powerful, Monica.
But you know that already. - Seth ✦
Thanks I appreciate you following her story.
I'm hooked. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
So I guess that is why you will have to keep reading. Right?
Of course!
I am so glad. What part of this chapter landed the most for you?
The imagery really captures my imagination. I feel a general bit up of suspense and keep wondering, "where is this going?"
The first serial on Substack, I actually come back to week after week.
Most I find hard to follow, but this is structured in a way that it is accessible.
A rare feat indeed, Monica, interested to see where it goes.
Thank you so much. I appreciate that you are a loyal reader. 😊 your comment has made my day.
The gap between institutionalized language and real language of humans is very apparent in this chapter. Mara’s dad who studies cracks in bridges is portrayed so well. Sorrel’s character is developing noticeably. Well done!
Thank you Nabanita. I am so glad you are enjoying this series.
You bet.
This was really interesting, Monica !!
Thank you for following Sorrel's story. Chapters 1-3 with their echo poems are available as well. Chapter 4 echo just published.
Very interesting character, looking forward to reading more
Thanks. Have you read the other chapters by chance?
Yes
Awesome - thanks for reading. I welcome all feedback as you continue to follow the story.